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[NapisaurusRex]

Entry #1

In between where the pavements meet
The mascara runs as the rain strokes my face
As you touch the bullet holes in the wall and laugh
What a wonderful place it would be
Were it not that you are not there
And never were
And never will be
In between where the pavements meet

 

Entry #2

Our kingdom is between the sheets, 

immune to the arrows flung by 
infidelity and overdue rent.
Under the covers we are lovers, 
confined by our passion 
to extreme pleasure or depression.
Our lies will unravel soon, 
stretched thin as we stray further
each afternoon, only coming home to
dream about what could have been.

 

 

And a quick recap of the rules and stuff:

Theme: The place in between (poetry)

Write a poem about the place in between, where two songs collide on the radio, dawn and dusk, the moment right when you wake up but not really, static, falling, etc



Rules:
1. You must write it yourself.
2. It must follow Codex rules.
5. No multiple entries


Prizes

Baby Paint Brush by @rauul


This award for the winner! 

[Cass]

(psst @Jess, poll?)

[NapisaurusRex]

Shit, I even kept reminding myself in my head.

[Shannon]

#2 seemed to miss the point of the prompt, so I'm voting #1. I especially liked the bullet holes in the wall bit.

[Fikri]

woah, erotic poem in neocodex. that never happened.

[Katya]

woah, erotic poem in neocodex. that never happened.

 

Erotic? Where? Lol

[Fikri]

Erotic? Where? Lol

 

"sheet" "arrow" "unravel" "stretched"

 

someone bring me the holy water.

[Swar]

I don't think #2 missed the point. They just interpreted it differently. I like it.

[Keil]

I don't think #2 missed the point. They just interpreted it differently. I like it.

 

I agree. Between the sheets is still a place in-between and normally, I would discredit it if it were just a throw-in just to fulfill the prerequisites, but the poem is aptly expanding on a physically-surrounded location and carried it throughout the piece just as, if not, better than entry #1.

[Shannon]

I agree. Between the sheets is still a place in-between and normally, I would discredit it if it were just a throw-in just to fulfill the prerequisites, but the poem is aptly expanding on a physically-surrounded location and carried it throughout the piece just as, if not, better than entry #1.

Eh, I didn't see it that way but to each their own. I felt like #1 actually took the prompt and used it in a more creative, symbolic way.

[talbs]

Only 2 entries? Slackers.

[Shane]

Oh poop, I forgot to enter.

[Grumpy]

Oh poop, I forgot to enter.

 

Me too!  Next one, just wait.  

[DonValentino]

That's what they all say

[Rauul]

entry #2 is fantastic, reminds me a depressive robin hood sleeping with me, dont know why