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[AlphaDog]

There's a river high in the mountains
That's been flowin' since who knows when.
No one's sure just how it started,
But it's never gonna end.

Our love is like that river,
Flowin' through all time.
Heaven knows I need you,
And/but* I'll never change my mind!

Heaven knows how I love you, and I'll never change my mind.

[Sida]

Stick with And instead of But, and lose the single line at the end.
Tis good man.

[Sida]

lol peom

I read it first as 'Peon' and thought of the orc slaves in WoW x.x

[Cyo]

thats not poem

no rhyme

[AlphaDog]

thats not poem

no rhyme

And...your point is

[Cyo]

And...your point is

he say poem


i say not poem cuz no rhyme

my point is he is liar

[Sweeney]

he say poem


i say not poem cuz no rhyme

my point is he is liar

Poetry doesn't have to rhyme.

[Cyo]

Poetry doesn't have to rhyme.

lol r u retarted?

poem is like:

my nigger
fo shizzle
hes wigger
down a nizzle

see, nigger and wigger rhyme and shizzle and nizzle rhyme eventho this is not words but slang

if ur poetry not rhyme then its just super short story with badly format text

[Sida]

lol r u retarted?

poem is like:

my nigger
fo shizzle
hes wigger
down a nizzle

see, nigger and wigger rhyme and shizzle and nizzle rhyme eventho this is not words but slang

if ur poetry not rhyme then its just super short story with badly format text

Lol you said that to the wrong person. You're gonna get a mouthful back from that

[Sweeney]

Lol you said that to the wrong person. You're gonna get a mouthful back from that

Not worth it, tbh.

[AlphaDog]

I would hate to meet the writer that wrote that poem xP