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[iargue]

I want to love you
I want to care for you
I want to play with you
I want you

but i cant have you
it hurts deep within
cutting down
the pressup is building

bark you too
how come you feel
this way?
am i not worth it?

do i not take the time
to notice the small things
this hurts too much
i want you

but i cant have you
i dont deserve you
i am not worth you
i die alone

so, what do you think?

and uh, i need a title

[Justin]

Is there an english version?

[iargue]

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[Bryan]

Vocab need help man =/

It don't make sense.

It's basically saying I love you, but I can't have you. bark you, do you you not think I'm worth it. I notice details, but this hurts. I don't deserve you, I'm alone.

It doesn't make sense, and for a poem, it needs a much better word choice.

[iargue]

Vocab need help man =/

It don't make sense.

It's basically saying I love you, but I can't have you. bark you, do you you not think I'm worth it. I notice details, but this hurts. I don't deserve you, I'm alone.

It doesn't make sense, and for a poem, it needs a much better word choice.

it makes perfect sense dude.

[Jewbert]

Wow....not even barking close to Poe....

Haha.

Cata agrees..."I hope you have a 'Loss of Breath,'" he says.

[Bryan]

Logic is related to experience, and I suppose experience is limited to the individual.

But whatever, I don't think it makes sense, and I understand a lot of things.

[foogie]

lol, title? keep it simple. "I want you" is a fitting title. *nods*

[philywilly]

Constant repetition of the word "you".. gets annoying.

[foogie]

Constant repetition of the word "you".. gets annoying.

well, what do you expect? it's an emo poem. I believe they are meant to annoy.

[iargue]

well, what do you expect? it's an emo poem. I believe they are meant to annoy.

i dunno, i just wrote it...

[ATHFBlink]

Title- "bark it"?

[Christopher Robin]

Emo Poems = Emo... wants a rasor? Typo I don't like emo poems, next one I won't reply to xD

[ink]

This is far from "emo". At least people like emo things, this is just horrible. You butcher the term poem, you use English like a razor, cutting a deep vein called social intellect. You are TOTALLY EMO!

My version of your poems:

You don't like me
You really don't
Shun me if you try
Because I would rather die

You hate me
You love me
You live above me
In my sociopathic head

I need you
I want you
Like the way my wrists bled?
Because I like to have sex with the dead

I like playing with females
Because they have funny genitals
I wish I could mess with myself
But that would be sinful

Oh wait, nevermind
I really like guys
Guess what everybody
I hope everyone, especially you, DIES

I AM EMO
I LIKE SCREAMO
I PEE MY PANTS
BECAUSE MATT MADE ME EMO
EMO
E.M.O.

Yo.
Yo.
Yo.

The only thing I know how to rhyme with rhyme
Is sublime
Because that was a band
My brain is a can

WEEE A.D.D.
Like Math Add.

LET US GO OFF TOPIC
YAY GENITALS

[Christopher Robin]

BAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA Ink That SCREAMS hilarious at me Plainly versed emo song Awesome.